A Flash Story


One night I was walking around town with my friends Alex and Ben. We had finished our football game earlier that night. Ben had hit the game winning field goal as time expired, winning 23-20. It was almost 10:30 at night, when we heard an alarm go off about a block from us. We quickly ran and investigated the screeching noise. Once we turned the corner we saw the broken glass of the bank. We thought someone was robbing the store. Only being fourteen year olds, we didn’t really know what to do. We figured the police were already alerted and were on the way, but we decided to take matters into our own hands. We quickly rushed over to the door and looked inside. We couldn’t believe what we saw next. We saw Mr. Williams bent over sweeping the broken glass off the floor. We asked him what happened and he showed us a baseball with almost the whole cover ripped off. We then looked and noticed the neighboring old sandlot across the street. We then helped Mr. Williams clean up the shards of glass. He thanked us for the help and we went on our way.

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  1. Peyton's English 1 BlogOctober 1, 2017 at 5:53 PM

    This is a great example of a flash story. I love the comedy in this short story. Also, how it is anti-climactic.

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  2. JC's BlogOctober 3, 2017 at 9:37 AM

    I liked the way you brought suspense into the story. Also the way the story ended in an anti climatic way.

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